Dependence on technology

Мнение автора +
As far as I am concerned, people have become overly dependent on technology in many spheres, from how we communicate, to how we relax, learn, and even receive the news. There are several facts which prove my opinion. To begin with, a taxi driver uses a GPS app to drive, he or she cannot do the job without this achievement of technological progress. Moreover, there is mental dependence on technology. It is believed by many scientists that a person gets used to a mobile phone and without adequate usage of it, he or she feels anger and anxiety.
As far as I’m concerned не решает задачу linking word (обычно для устной речи )
he or she cannot do the job without this achievement of technological progress какую именно профессию нет точности
По организации лучше начинать с аргументов (от общего к частному) а потом доказывать фактами there is mental dependence on technology – один аргумент в первом случае – в этой работе вы начинали подчёркивать в профессии

Мнение оппонента -
Despite all of this, others have an objection to this statement. They assume that a human organism has a certain feature; it can adapt to any conditions. For instance, there are cases when people have survived after an aircraft, living in tough conditions – without electricity and fresh water.
Первое предложение нарушает логику и организацию
Тема surviving and adaptation to any condition нет связи с проблемой из условия как это обуславливает зависимость от технологий?

Опровержение -
Personally, I strongly object to this statement because men are losing this opportunity. It happens because in most cases people do not need to use the adaptive feature of their organism. So, because of it, men are losing this opportunity.
men are losing this opportunity – какую именно возможность*
Параграф выходи на др проблему losing opportunities